User:Merrill248/Discrimination in Education/Dowhannah Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Merrill248


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Discrimination in education- They are still working on making changes


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Discrimination in education

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * I was impressed that the article examined the topic in different countries. I think it is interesting to convey that this is an international issue, rather than solely a local, regional, or national one.


 * What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * I suggest adding more to the introduction section. This would improve the article because it would more clearly define the issue. Also, I feel as though the article would benefit from having more subtopics listed under the "Teacher bias in grading" section. More thorough elaboration on this point would elucidate what the real issue is and why it matters. Also, some places have citations that are formatted like in-text citations, but this is not necessary on Wikipedia, so I suggest removing the formatted citations and just making sure that each sentence that needs a citation is just linked to the correct reference at the bottom of the page.


 * What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * I think the most important thing the author could do to improve the article would just be to add more overall content, and to make sure to include citations for all new information.


 * Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * I think that my article also needs more sections and more information in general, so I will work on improving this in my own article as well!