User:Metomlinson/Feminist Archaeology/Sumeya333 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Metomlinson
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Metomlinson/Feminist Archaeology

Lead
The Lead has not yet been updated but other sections of the article have.

Content
The content added to this article is relevant to the topic. Metomlinson added a new subheading 'Black Feminist Contributions to Archaeology' to create a section for this topic which was brought up many times in the original article but had not been given a heading of its own. The content added to this section is minimal but notes there will be more added soon (in draft). Another section, Prehistory, is added which improves the layout of the article and allows for greater content division. Perhaps a citation could be added after "Sterling provides an example for how black feminist theory can be applied to the latter.". The final heading 'Impact of Feminist Archaeology' has two up-to-date citations. I would say the article does address topics related to historically underrepresented populations/topics simply by putting 'Black Feminist Contributions to Archaeology' on the radar.

Tone and Balance
I think the tone could be more neutral; words like 'undoubtably' and 'often' come up which could be seen as exaggerative or exasperting a point that could be made with less emotion. I think the sentence "Gender is often treated merely as a variable within a larger framework that includes many other variables" leaves much to be considered. Overall it is clear to read and could be more balanced but I know these are drafts and nowhere near complete with inadequate citations etc.

Sources and References
So far there are two citations listed and both lead to reliable sources. The second one comes up as "no-break space character in  at position 9 (help); Check date values in:   (help)" and I'm not sure what that means. However both sources reflect literature representative of their work and this topic of Feminist Archaeology. The sources are written by two women, and although white women are not historically marginalized individuals, these authors are non-men and that counts for something.

Organization
The content is well written and really easy to read. There are no grammatical or spelling errors and it is well-organized, I can see where it will take shape when finalized. In terms of organization, it is an improvement on the original as it breaks down reoccuring topics into their own sections.

Images and Media
N/A there are no images to review.

Overall impressions
Overal, the content added here improved the overall quality of the article. Their additions are not complete as this is a draft sort of submission but they are on their way to being so. With some work, the new information added could strengthen the entire piece. The content added could be improved by paying more attention to the words used and making sure they aren't so emotive, and by adding more citations with. Overall great work.