User:Metsvikingsfan5/Herbert Lee (activist)/Terrapin2022 Peer Review

General info
Metsvikingsfan5
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Metsvikingsfan5/Herbert Lee (activist)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Herbert Lee (activist)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The proposed changes within the Sandbox drafting I saw was mainly just one paragraph of information that is planned on being included in the article. The paragraph used a great reference when stating information learned. The coercion note is good, but where did that information come from? How do we know Hurst coerced the eyewitnesses, and who were they?

I also feel the structure of the main article that is published could benefit from a section about the trial. What you intend to add is the act of the murder, but the coercion and trial don't necessarily mean the murder, they are more the outcome and legal side after the murder. You could make that a separate structure within the main article in order to best organize the events and points of Herbert Lee.

Another thing, looking at the main article page, what is the difference between references and bibliography citations? That is something I personally am confused on because references in the article lead to the references down below, but what do the bibliographies within the article do? That doesn't affect your sandbox drafting, but that might be something to consider changing in the main article while planning in your sandbox.