User:MewMobile/Patricia Gregory/Jacob Khorsandi Peer Review

Peer review:


 * 1) Lead: This sandbox draft has not inputted a "Lead" title yet.
 * 2) Content: The content is relevant to Patricia Gregory; specifically, it clearly highlights her feminist activism in football. The content effectively illustrates the sexist issue in football: women were not allowed to play football in the FA Cup, as it was evidently banned. After the problem is clearly presented, the writer accurately demonstrates how Patricia persistently played football and continued to travel the country to play against youth men's teams.
 * 3) Tone and Balance: This article presents Patricia's activism in a neutral tone. This tone reflects an objective and informative attitude, which is crucial when formulating a Wikipedia page. The writer effectively represents Patricia's own outlook and actions after women were banned from playing football in the FA Cup.
 * 4) Sources and References: The sources in this article appear to be decent or moderate in terms of scholarly authors. The Guardian and the BBC Sports organizations provide compelling evidence and testaments to Patricia's brave activism in football. Moreover, the writer utilizes a plethora of sources, which is rich in textual details.
 * 5) Organization: This article is well organized, given its current sections. I admire that Patricia's most recent activism is illustrated near the end of the sandbox draft. In addition, I believe that the introductory paragraph is concise and accurately placed within the entire article.
 * 6) Images and Media: This article does not utilize images or media.
 * 7) Regarding Notability, I believe that this article makes a compelling case for being notable, given the plethora of sources regarding Patricia Gregory. Moreover, although The Guardian and the BBC are not highly scholarly sources, they do provide vivid details and evidence of Patricia's activism against the sexist football ban.
 * 8) Overall Impressions: I believe that the strengths of this article is the clear organization/headings of paragraphs and the descriptive and vivid text. Moreover, although this draft possesses a plethora of rich sources regarding Patricia Gregory, I believe that the sources are not highly scholarly secondary sources.

General info
I am reviewing the sandbox draft regarding Patricia Gregory, which is written by MewMobile, Kansastilbury, Abigmana, and Borna Haghighat.
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:MewMobile/Patricia Gregory
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