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Good job editing your entry! I've made some comments throughout where you could add more info, make something clearer, or improve the writing, but once you make these corrections, it should be ready to publish on the main space!

You've made a lot of improvements to your entry! There are a few things you should revise that I've noted throughout the entry below but overall, this is now a strong article! Once you revise what I've noted, you'll be ready to move the article to the main space. Let me know if you have any questions or want me to look over it again before you move everything over. - Sara

Patricia "Pat" Gregory (born Patricia Alice Jane Gregory) was born in London, England c.1947 (C. or circa is usually used when dates are approximate/not certain. If her year of birth is definitely 1947, just say she was born in 1947 without the c.). As a teenager, Gregory questioned the exclusion of women's participation in football. Her most written account of this thought process' conception was during the men's Football Association Challenge cup (FA Cup) in 1967. (I wouldn't include the preceding two sentences, as this is meant to be a short introduction) She became a vocal activist for women's football and is a founding member of the Women's Football Association (WFA) in England.

She also became well-known for her contributions in forming White Ribbon, the first women's competitive football team to compete in the FA Cup after the 1921 women's football ban. She worked as a secretary for some time in the WFA, and later continued to work in football administration as a British Broadcasting Corporation Sport (BBC Sport) special projects manager. She also worked with Independent Television (ITV) and became a member of the Union of European Football Association (UEFA) Women's Football Committee in 1979 and the Women’s Football Alliance Committee. Her latest efforts include a push to give the original 1972 Lionesses team and all female football players legacy caps.

Feminist efforts in football[edit]
Gregory's inspiration for activism began when she watched Tottenham's male players celebrate their FA Cup victory in 1967. She has described feeling confused as to why women were not allowed to play in the FA Cup. To confront this issue, at the age of 19, Gregory wrote a letter to her local paper, The Hornsey Journal, in hopes of creating a women's football team to compete in the league, and several women wrote back to Gregory asking to be members. Fifteen women eventually met in her family's living room and conceived the team now known as White Ribbon. In 1967, Gregory submitted a proposal to the FA in an attempt to join the league with her team. However, due to a 1921 ban by the United Kingdom's Football Association, women were banned from joining the FA Cup leading to their initial rejection.

The 1921 ban was implemented due to the Dick, Kerr Ladies women's charity match in 1920. The match was attended by 53,000 fans and raised about £140,000. This growing popularity concerned the FA because they had no control over the huge sums of money raised, which went to working class causes. As a result, one year later after the match in 1921, the FA voted to ban women's football. Although they could not ban women from playing football altogether, they were able to ban women from playing on FA affiliated football grounds for 51 years.

Despite the ban, Gregory and her White Ribbon team continued to travel the country to play against youth men's teams. Gregory also released an advertisement in a football magazine that attempted to find teams to play against. The advertisement caught the attention of a man named Arthur Hobbs. Prior to meeting Gregory, Hobbs was in charge of running women's football tournaments. After they both met, Hobbs and Gregory agreed to set up the South East of England League and from 1967 to 1969, the two set up numerous leagues together. Hobbs and Gregory also worked together to establish the WFA in 1969.

A few months after the first WFA meeting, there was growing momentum for women's football from across the country and in Europe. The UEFA was among those that built pressure against the FA to lift the ban. In late 1969, Gregory was informed there was a possibility the 1921 ban would be lifted the following year. It was officially rescinded in 1970, just a year after the founding of the WFA. After this period, meetings between the FA and WFA led to an agreement that all clubs affiliated the the WFA were to be overseen and under the jurisdiction of the national association, which helped communicate with the Fédération internationale de football association (French for 'International Association Football Federation (FIFA) and UEFA. The jurisdiction of the WFA was limited, however, as they were put in charge of day-to-day duties, but were not financially supported or allowed to play mixed football matches.

Late career[edit]
In 1970, Gregory served as the secretary in the sports department of the BBC. Gregory also served as the WFA's volunteer assistant until she took over Hobbs' position as secretary in 1972. She was the secretary for 9 years until 1981 and was later succeeded by Linda Whitehead. During her time in the WFA, she served many roles such as liaison officer and chair, and became the Honorary Life Vice president-of the WFA in 1984. In 1978, Gregory was also the first Network Sports Coordinator for ITV. She continued to work in football administration and became a member of the UEFA Women's Football Committee in 1979 where she served 7 terms. She was a member of the committee from 1980 to 1994. In 1993, Gregory decided to come back to the BBC and (the connection between these two parts of the sentence is confusing. Did she go back to the BBC because of this merger? Make this more clear) the WFA and FA had merged due to financial strain, with the FA fully taking over the tasks of the WFA. She later joined the FA and was on The Women’s Football Alliance Committee. However, Gregory actively expressed her dislike for the taking over of the FA, pointing out that it does not acknowledge the decades of work and longer history of the women's game. She then retired in the year 2010.

Legacy caps[edit]
As of 2022, Gregory has been heavily involved in a project by the FA to award legacy caps to the original 1972 Lionesses and all female players that followed them. Awarding legacy caps is a tradition with the men's England team, and recent efforts by the FA include a commitment to honor every women's player with them as well. This process has presented some challenges as the FA did not find it beneficial to keep records when they took over women's football from the WFA in 1993. Nevertheless, Gregory and fellow WFA founder David Marlowe managed to recover many records and offered them to the FA. Some of the records were taken and some were kept in a British library. However, most of the records were disposed of.

Your entry is off to a good start but it does need further revisions and some more information to be ready to be moved to the main space. First, there are a number of grammatical issues and issues with clarity or wording that should be edited. I've marked those in the text, though be sure to also edit for any others and make sure your tone/wording remains neutral and not too informal. Additionally, there are some places where I feel you could add more information and context and in general your entry feels a little short. On this note, it might be a good idea to add a section about the history of women's football in England before Patricia Gregory, which you discuss but could hopefully be expanded to its own section. I've made comments in parenthesis and bold throughout the text. Let me know if you have any questions! - Sara

Patricia "Pat" Gregory (born Patricia Alice Jane Gregory) is a founding member of the Women's Football Association (WFA) in England and became well known for her contributions in forming White Ribbon, the first women's competitive football team to compete in the Football Association Challenge Cup (FA Cup) after the 1921 women's football ban. She worked as a secretary for some time in the WFA and later continued to work in football administration as a BBC Sport special projects manager.

Born in London, England c.1947, she is the second child, after her older brother Ieuan. Her father, George was initially unsupportive of her efforts to include women in competitive football leagues. (I'm not sure these sentences belong in the lead section. This section should really just give the most pertinent background information. I would still include her birth year and place of birth but move this to the beginning)

Feminist efforts in football[edit]
Gregory's inspiration for activism began when she watched Tottenham's male players celebrate their FA Cup victory in 1967. She became perplexed as to why women were not allowed to play in the FA Cup. To confront this issue, at the age of 19, Gregory wrote a letter to her local paper, The Hornsey Journal, and women wrote back to Gregory asking to be a part of her team. Fifteen women eventually met in her family's living room and conceived of the team now known as the White Ribbon. In 1967, Gregory also submitted a proposal to the FA attempting to join the league with her team. However due to a 1921 ban by the United Kingdom's football association, women were banned from joining the FA, leading to her their (as in the team's) initial rejection.

The 1921 ban was implemented due to the Dick, Kerr Ladies women's charity match in 1920. The match was attended by 53,000 fans and raised about £140,000. This growing popularity concerned the FA because they had no control over the huge sums of money raised. As a result, one year later after the match in 1921, the FA agreed voted (awkward wording) to ban women's football. Although, they didn't couldn't (awkward) ban women from playing football altogether, they were able to ban women from playing on FA affiliated football grounds for 51 years. (perhaps you should include a section before this about the earlier history of women's football before Gregory where you would discuss this ban? Right now it kind of breaks up the flow of this section as we go backwards in time)

Despite the ban, Gregory and her White Ribbon team continued to travel the country to play against youth men's teams. Gregory also decided to put an advert in a football magazine asking for teams to play. This advert caught the attention of a man named Arthur Hobbs. Hobbs and Gregory would later work together to establish the WFA in 1969. A few months after the first WFA meeting there was growing momentum for women's football from across the country and in Europe. In addition, the Union of European Football Association's (UEFA) began to share this sentiment as well and this pressured the FA to lift the ban. At the end of 1969, Gregory was notified that the 1921 ban was planning on being (wordy) lifted the following year. It was officially rescinded in 1970, just a year after the founding of the WFA. This eventually led to meetings between the FA and WFA where they agreed that all clubs affiliated the the WFA were to be overseen and under the jurisdiction of the National Association, which would help communicate with FIFA and UEFA. The jurisdiction of the WFA was limited, however, as they were put in charge of day-to-day duties but were not financially supported or allowed to play mixed football matches.

Gregory also served as a volunteer assistant secretary for the WFA for some time, until she took over Hobbs' position as secretary in 1972. She continued to work in football administration until 1994 as a member of the UEFA Women's Football Committee. In 1993, the WFA and FA had merged due to financial strain, with the FA fully taking over the tasks of the WFA. Gregory has actively expressed her dislike for the take over of the FA, pointing out that it does not acknowledge the decades of work and longer history of the women's game. (Can you expand any more about her work in the WFA? Did she continue to play in these years or have any other notable achievements?)

Recent activism[edit]
As of 2022, Gregory has been heavily involved in a project by the Football Association to award legacy caps to the original 1972 Lionesses and all female players that followed them. Awarding legacy caps has been a tradition with the men's England team, but recent efforts by the FA include a commitment to honor every women's player with them as well. This process has presented some challenges as the FA did not find it beneficial to keep records when they took over women's football from the Women’s Football Association in 1993. Nevertheless, Gregory and fellow WFA founder David Marlowe managed to recover many records and offered them to the Football Association. Some of the records were taken and some were kept in a British library. However, most of the records were disposed of. (Since this section only deals with this one issue, it might make more sense to retitle the section to something reflecting this focus more directly)

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