User:Mfajardo2/Questioning (sexuality and gender)/Ninty900 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mfajardo2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mfajardo2/Questioning_(sexuality_and_gender)?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template (Version as of 3:30 pm CST on 11/16/2021)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Questioning (sexuality and gender)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that this is a good section to have, although if possible with more categories of people than just heterosexual women. It seems like you're using a lot of direct quotations though, and I think it would be better if you could rewrite it to be in your own words.

If you're going to keep some of the quotes, you should use single quotes when there's a quote within a quote. For example, in the "Other-sex influences" section, "being homosexual" should be changed to 'being homosexual'.

It might also be good to point out explicitly that the process of questioning one's sexuality varies a lot from person to person. It's implied by the number of different categories, but it could be worth pointing out anyway to make sure it's clear.

Overall, I think you have a good start here, it just needs some cleaning up and expanding.

Ninty900 (talk) 21:43, 16 November 2021 (UTC)