User:Mgordier/Perpetual access/Ginnerz06 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mgordier


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mgordier/Perpetual access


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Perpetual access

Lead
The lead section for this article appears to be the beginning of a rewrite of the existing lead section. It reflects new content added by the author and includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic. Since the remainder of the article has yet to be written and I did not see an outline of planned sections, the lead will need a brief description of the article's major sections once they are defined.

Content
All content currently included in this draft is relevant to perpetual access. The content in the draft seems to be up to date and will be further addressed in the Sources and References section below. I expect there is quite a bit of content missing from this article but that all depends on how the author decides to structure this article. While all the content seems to be relevant, each paragraph seems to be addressing an element of perpetual access without identifying how it fits into the discussion of this topic. The author should consider section headings such as relevant licensing laws, the history of scholarly discussion around this topic, challenges to perpetual access and current expert recommendations on how to address it. This article also presents an opportunity to address topics related to historically underrepresented populations, in this case I'm thinking of people living in communities without access to broadband services and necessary equipment. What does perpetual access mean for those without internet access when living in a society that continues to move basic services to online only environments? This could be noted with Census or Pew Research statistics in order to shine a light on how many people are lacking access.

Tone & Balance
The majority of content is written in a neutral tone, but there are few words to consider modifying.


 * "have garnered some more recent attention" Avoid using words that relatively refer to time and instead consider including the year the source this derived from was published. Words like "some" and "more" should also be more specific.
 * "Even so, licensing agreements do not always even include perpetual access." The use of even in this sentence implies the author's expectations around perpetual access. Consider removing or avoiding the use of language that implies the author's opinion.

Sources and References
All the content currently in this draft is backed up by reliable secondary sources of information with active links and appear to reflect what the cited sources say, although only one appears to be current. There should be more current sources cited throughout this draft, some of which may come from the publication currently included in the draft sources section by Polchow (2021).

Organization
Most sentences in this draft are well written, but it is lacking structure and there are no sentences or sections to tie concepts together. Each sentence on its own is concise, clear and easy to read with no spelling errors. Once this draft has more content organized into sections it may be easier to follow.

Images and Media
Images and media have yet to be added by the user in this draft. From a review of the current version of the article as well as the draft written by this user, I do not think there is any pertinent place where images or media would enhance the content.

Overall Impressions
This article draft is in the beginning stages with a few additional citations that will improve the overall quality of this article. Once there are sections and more content written the article will be closer to completion. This author can write well in the appropriate tone for Wikipedia and has many opportunities ahead of them to enhance this article.