User:Mhanna1/Sinaloa Cartel/WinnieAbraham Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
I really like the bibliography and the cited annotations because they are all connected with one another. I do not understand fully the structure but I know based on what she said that she wants to take a long article and rearrange it. I like how detailed the bibliography is, it is very easy to follow. I also really enjoy her adding to the article because it shows a fully invested interest in the topic. Additionally, adds more clarity to the article that it lacked before. I would suggest using more articles from Google Scholar, when I used it was a lot easier for me to get articles that explained certain things that I did not get from her original articles. Significant topics and themes I feel that can be added are how cartel affects the rest of the world and comparing them to the others. As well as the effect it has on the economy.

review #2

I really enjoyed the article and the bibliography because of how structured it was as well as easy to follow. When reading I started thinking about my own and how I can improve mine in terms of word choice and list structure. I honestly do not have much to improve I would just say become even more detailed along with the structure. I feel that it will take the article from good to great. However, keep up the good work and thank you for the inspiration.