User:Mhayko11/Joslyn Art Museum/WitchyWriter Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mhayko11


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mhayko11/Joslyn_Art_Museum?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Joslyn Art Museum

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead section:

This section is looking good. The information you added really helps the section. Adding the mission statement is a nice touch. The only issue that I'm find is the two groups of names that are listed as artists. Is there a reason they're separated like that? Is the second list not always part of the museum? The phrasing is a bit awkward.

The article:

What's needed mostly is some grammatical fixes of sentences, mostly adding some commas here and there for readability. A few spelling errors. n the last paragraph of Joslyns section, there is a switch to present tense in one sentence, but everything else is in past tense. I think a good read-through would help to catch the grammatical issues.

The article is very balanced. Everything looks very well cited. The additional sections about the Joslyns and the admission was thoughtful and well put. Looks like next steps are editing and maybe some images and the collection section. Looking really good! ~Britt