User:Mhdav9/Camden Snow Bowl/Khascall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Mhdav9


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mhdav9/Camden_Snow_Bowl


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Camden Snow Bowl

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! To make sure everyone gets 2 reviews, I'm volunteering to do one for you. This is entirely preliminary; we'll do another pass when you're ready to go live.

Lead
I see you've made a substantial expansion to the text and updated the lead. Adding more information about summer activities and ski facility makes sense -- make sure that lands in the main article as well as the lead....that said, you don't want to go overboard, since this is an encyclopedia entry not a travel guide entry.

Content
Overall the content looks good. Are there non-tourism details that can be incorporated, i.e. more about natural features/geology, or more history or news that might be added? Check Saddleback Maine (ski resort) to see if it inspires you. Also, it seems a bit unusual that the ski area is town-owned. That suggests there should be some local politics involved with its existence and operation. Wikipedia articles use sentence case in subheads so I fixed that for you.

Tone and Balance
Articles about companies need to be particularly careful about not being promotional in tone. So far this looks ok but needs some work (you might want to reword or omit phrases like "great" "culmination" "30+ years" (should be 'since XXXXXyear') "Looking to modernize the resort and upgrade infrastructure") Some of the tone problems I see are actually from people before you ("easily be seen"), so do your best.

Sources and References
I'm not seeing new references -- there was a duplication which I fixed for you; it's sort of a subtle problem where refs end up duplicated if they're already present, and the easy way to fix that isn't available if the original usage is in an infobox. Newspaper articles from the area might be your best source for extending this article.

Organization
The expanded structure makes sense, although I wish there were a map or something to help me make sense of where the ski area is versus where the toboggan chute is versus where winterfest is held. That would help me know if these should be separate sections or if one really belongs as a subsection of another.

Images and Media
Images aren't required, but they'd be really great for this article. Sadly, I don't see any in commons. If you felt like donating your own photo that you took yourself, that's an option (no pressure at all, just want you to know it's an option if you do have a photo -- process is described here: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Special:UploadWizard

Overall impressions
In general this is on a good trajectory. My main concerns are tone/sourcing, which I think can be solved but will need some effort. Keep going!