User:Miahutchinson1233333/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
(Provide a link to the article here.) Individualistic culture

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose to evaluate this article to learn more about and individualistic culture and its characteristics. To explain, almost every prominent society in modern society is individualistic or has individualistic characteristics. Specifically, the United States of America is a society with many different cultures but is both collectivists and individualistic. In all, I choose to evaluate the article I did because it does not have much information or updated sources.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section: To start, when reading the Individualistic culture article there is an introductory sentence that clearly and concisely described what an individualistic culture is. After reading the contents section there is information present that is not mentioned in the lead or introduction. The introduction (lead) is also concise and not very detailed and a description of the articles major sections is not included.

Context: The information presented in the article has both relevant information and non-relevant information. For example, relevant information includes descriptions of individualistic countries, the communication used in individualistic cultures, and information about the emotion display and display rules. Some non-relevant information is information about collectivist cultures and societies. I believe the sections on low power distance, work-family balance, marriage and family dynamics, and low-context communication style need to be edited, so these ideas and examples related to an individualistic culture are shown. Information about individualistic cultures' competitiveness may require a separate section or clarification (it is currently in conflict strategies).Information about collectivism, tragic deaths, and Edward T Hall was distracting for me. Next, information about the United States ranking on low power distance is incorrect and needs to be updated. The article on Individualistic culture does not include information about notable equity gaps or underrepresenting or misrepresenting historically marginalized populations. To improve this article, the lead section should include examples of an individualistic culture, information about collectivist cultures should be removed, and more.

Tone and Balance: I believe the tone of this article is mostly neutral but there is some bias language present when describing collectivist cultures. Some example are, the national culture, emotion display and display rules, marriage and family dynamics, conflict strategies, and more. These sections make multiple mentions and comparisons between individualistic cultures and collectivist cultures. There is an underrepresentation of individualistic cultures examples and description of characteristics; furthermore, since collectivist cultures are mentioned a lot throughout the article one may assume that the article attempts to persuade readers towards collectivists. However, I believe the article does not persuade readers from one point to another it just needs to be edited to include more information about individualistic cultures and remove the information about collectivist cultures.

Source and References: Approximately seven website and academic journals links in the references section work, and about three do not work it says, page not found when I click the link. Next, there are two references without a link or an ISBN page. Additionally, all the sources listed in the references appear to be from reliable websites and are diverse, including books and academic journals. Most of the sources listed on the reference page are outdated, ranging between 1980 and 2010. From research conducted, there are new sources and better sources available such as:Some characteristics of an individualistic culture is a consideration for a persons personal accomplishments, independence, self-fulfillment, and personal identity. Another example is: according to a study conducted by John Sosik and Dong Jung, in individualistic cultures, people perform better in group work than those from collectivist cultures are more likely to want instant praise and recognition. The study found that people in individualistic cultures appreciate diverse new perspectives and have a short sense of time.

Organization and Writing Quality: The original author(s) broke the article into sections listing some of the significant or important topics (to them) about an individualistic culture. Overall, the article is concise and clearly written, and I did not find any spelling or grammar errors.

Images and Media: There are no images present in the Individualistic culture article.

Talk Page Discussion: When viewing the articles talk page, it was nominated for deletion on October 31, 2011, but was not deleted. Most people agree that this article has bias for collectivist cultures when it is meant to be about individualistic cultures. In the past, this article was used for approximately 4 Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignments [edit].

Overall Impression: The strengths in the article are:


 * The lead.
 * The information provided in the National Culture section.
 * The conciseness of the article.

I believe this article is underdeveloped; when reviewing the sources and information presented in the article, some useful and interesting information is present describing an individualistic culture, but more detail and editing are needed. To repeat, to improve this article, I would add more detail about individualistic cultures in the lead. Additionally, elaboration on how each section in the article relates to an individualistic culture is needed, and information about collectivist cultures needs to be removed.