User:Miahutchinson1233333/Individualistic culture/Smazzarella14 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mia Hutchinson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Miahutchinson1233333/Individualistic_culture?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Individualistic culture

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead
 * Overall, I think that you have added a decent amount of information to the lead section, thank you for clarifying that you had taken your information out of the sandbox.
 * Based on the work that your produced by adding to the lead is quite good
 * You could also added a photo of Geert Hofsted or any other photos based on the information in the article

Body


 * In the Low-Power Distance section, I noticed that the term is referred to as Power Distance. I would maybe add a sentence explaining that it has two different names or something so that way it comes off clearer to the reader.
 * You gave the Low-Power Distance a good description, however I would add to the list of countries you have into further detail of the leadership and who has what power.
 * In the Low-Context I would maybe add a year to when Edward T. Hall first introduced the term to establish more of a timeline.
 * Also even though it may be hard to find information on the topic, but you could always add some more information to beef up the section if possible

References


 * I'm not sure if you worked on the references, but I would look into the references that have the red check date values in. However, they are not like that on the main article, so it may just be due to copying and pasting it to your sandbox, so just make sure before you publish to the article.