User:Miaisa5224/Peer review/Gaucho221 Peer Review

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Miaisa5224


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Miaisa5224/ Peer Review Draft
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 * Peer review

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

From the start, I was wondering where you will be adding all this, there is no note on where it will be added, or will you be doing a new separate section? I think from first glance at this draft I definitely noticed that you were leaning more towards talking about how peer review is seen in different settings. I also noticed some grammatical errors that I think could be improved (it is just the way that words are ordered). For example, you said "For peers providing feedback, a helpful tip is for them", but instead you could say "A helpful tip for peers that are providing feedback..." Additionally, you also said, "To begin, students benefit..." instead you could just start off with "Students benefit..." Another thing that I noticed was that you do not have any references, which should be added in both the reference list and the in the text that you will be adding. I think that the first paragraph you wrote is a bit long and not as engaging, maybe you could break it up in half so that readers can follow it more easily; another thing that I think you could do is add more onto your last paragraph where you talk about the challenges and complexities, I think that paragraph is really good. Overall, I think that you are off to a good start, I think you just need to watch out for your sentence transitions, references, and maybe think on how you want to engage the reader without seeming bias.