User:Miajgoldberg/Deaf Culture - Deaf Bing/Cam Structure Peer Review

Lead

 * The lead could use some work. I would be curious to see if you could simplify the lead and make it easier to comprehend. I know what bing is but only because I've taken so many ASL classes. I wonder if there is a way to simplify it for hearing people who have no idea.

Content

 * Your content is great and you provide a lot of great examples but I would interested to see how you could arrange this into an article form. could you include maybe the history or something like that to include more content besides just the examples? For example, hand grabbing how it talks about police officers restraining Deaf people's hands. It might be interesting to tough some upon some of the history of that. Maybe try to explain each example little bit more in depth.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * tone is hard for me. The tone seems fine but I worry some people might think it is biased towards Deaf people. Which for me makes sense because it is Deaf focused article. I would ask Naomi what she thinks because this can be very tricky to navigate. I would also try to remove things like "this is not a typo" and such phrases like that. While it makes the article more interesting and fun to read it does make it appear less academic.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * sources is gonna be hard. I agree. I wonder...I know in the ASL 1-4 books it talks a lot about Deaf behavioral norms. I'm curious if you might link to those as they are published works. I am including the titles of those books and some other books that might help...emphasize the might! These are books from my Deaf history and culture, and my ASL classes. "Signing Naturally 1,2,3". "Deaf culture: Exploring Deaf communities in the United States". "The Deaf Community in America; History in the making". "The Deaf History Reader". " Open Your Eyes; Deaf Studies Talking". I hope this helps in some way.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * The content is concise and well written. However I would suggest some more organization in terms of content so that it is not just a list.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * You might be able to find some good images but Wikipedia's copyright policy makes it really hard. I think the link to videos is a Great idea and will definitely help.

I think this is a really great start. Your examples are awesome and very well thought out. Next I would just focus on organization and making it into more of an academic article. I think this could turn out to be a really really cool and fun article. I look forward to how it turns out. Best of luck to you guys!