User:Miajgoldberg/Deaf Culture - Deaf Bing/Lizzah12 Peer Review

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 * User:Miajgoldberg/Deaf Culture - Deaf Bing

Lead
The lead could use some work. In your explanation of how the word "bing" is not a typo... I think you could instead expand on it being a mouth movement (mouth morpheme), how it is a grammatical aspect of ASL (non manual marker), and how it is different from mouthing out words. You could even give some examples of common mouth movements & several Deaf slangs that accompany such movements such as CHA, VEE-VEE, PAH, FSH, etc. Some mouth morphemes may be a bit hard to describe however. I've noticed that several articles pertaining to ASL had some videos as visual examples, which is something that could perhaps be useful for this part. Don't forget to find reliable sources regarding this part of ASL linguistics! I would recommend something, but I can't think of any right now. Perhaps the suggestions given by the other reviewers will have some information regarding this topic.

Also I agree with Cam. You should try to explain what Deaf "bing" means in a way that hearing people who don't know anything about Deaf people & Deaf culture will be able to comprehend. I think the part about behavioral & social norms is good. You could revise the sentence about Deaf Tendencies to say that Deaf Bing means the common(?) tendency of Deaf people in Deaf culture... etc.

The following examples could be placed under a section titled "Deaf Bing Examples" or "Examples of Deaf Bing".

Content
Yes the content is absolutely relevant to the topic! Here are my thoughts:

Eye Contact: You could expand on this by explaining how ASL (and all other sign languages) are naturally visual-spatial languages, and that Deaf people are naturally visual people who rely on vision for access, communication, language, and language acquisition & development. Again it all goes back to the development of eye gaze/contact and its role in ASL acquisition/exposure. Therefore for us Deaf people, direct eye contact means that we are listening, that we are paying attention, that we are talking, etc. It plays a role in ASL linguistics and Deaf culture. You could also explain the reason why it comes off as rude if there is a lack of eye contact is because it sends a message that one is not listening or paying attention to the signer. Again it would be great if good sources could be found & used to support all of this, especially the cultural aspect.

For Hand Grabbing, Sports, & Hugs, I think all of that could be put into one category talking about how it is "Deaf bing" for us to be tactile. We hug, we pat arms or backs, we tap shoulders, etc.

Would long good-byes fit under the Deaf Standard Time section?

Meeting new people: Maybe some examples of this could be given, such as how you are expected to give your first AND last name, whether you are hearing or Deaf or HoH, where you are from, is your family hearing or Deaf? etc..... I wonder if there are any good sources written about this cultural tendency. This is not only exclusive to meeting new people either. You could also write about how it is a natural Deaf social/behavioral norm to share a lot.

Progeny: Many Deaf couples hope for a deaf baby and are disappointed if their child is born hearing. << This will definitely need to be expanded on, and good sources as well to support & explain how & why majority of the Deaf community do not consider themselves disabled. It would be a good idea to explain the reasonings as to why that label is rejected, and how Deaf culture & being Deaf is valued & that having a deaf baby would be passing down their Deaf culture and language to the next generation, just like how most hearing families pass down their culture and language to their children.

Storytelling: You could give several examples of Deaf Literature, such as ASL poetry, CL stories/poetry, HS stories, ABC stories, 123 stories, VV etc. You could take a look at some of the sources used in the American Sign Language Literature Wikipedia articles, perhaps they will be helpful.

I hope that my feedbacks were helpful!

Tone and Balance
I think the tone could use some work, and I think we shouldn't use "we" as a pronoun, as that makes the writing come across as less "academic".

Sources and References
There are no sources yet. I hope you'll be able to find some good sources so your explanations & examples can be backed up!

Organization
Guiding questions:

I think that once the summary/lead on Deaf Bing (its definition and its linguistic aspect) is refined and the content is more organized, the overall look of the article will look good.

Images and Media
I think adding some form of media as visual examples for ASL mouth morphemes could be a great idea.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?