User:Miamiheat12/Jewish Autonomism/Blue maple tree Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Miamiheat12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Miamiheat12/Jewish_Autonomism?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

What is Jewish Autonomism- I am unclear.

History of Jewish Autonomism:

Maybe mention who Dubnow is. Start a new paragraph when you mention the Bukovina Compromise.

Jewish Autonomisn in the US:

In the first sentence take out the word obvious. Maybe change the title for this section to something about Janowsky's opinions OR add more about other views on Jewish Autonomism in the US.

Overall this is really really good, you have a lot of good information however sometimes its a little dense and requires multiple reads in order for it to make sense. I think moving forward you could rearrange and add more paragraphs/spacing in order to make it easier for the reader to grasp the concepts.