User:Miamiheat12/Jewish Autonomism/Thamyco Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Miamiheat12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Miamiheat12/Jewish_Autonomism?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jewish Autonomism

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is a very comprehensive first draft, clearly explaining the logical paths that Autonomism took in its development, and how it interacts with other ideologies of the time. It focuses strongly on the theorists that worked with it, and a little less on the actual theories.

I think that the comparisons of Autonomism to Zionism go on a little long at times, and I would incorporate more of the long-term vision for Autonomism into the discussion, so that it remains the topic of the article

I think that the descriptions of the theories are done well, but it would be helpful to see more of a timeline with important dates of the development of Autonomism, and when specifically it diverged from other movements of the time.

There is also a lot of language of "success" and "failure" that feels too final and maybe even biased. If possible, try to use other words that show that zionism played out politically, but that don't imply that any movement is fully accepted or fully dead.

Sources are evenly distributed and the links work.