User:Mic-233/Fathom Five National Marine Park/Gsd7 Peer Review

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Mic-233

Fathom Five National Marine Park

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mic-233/Fathom_Five_National_Marine_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Fathom Five National Marine Park

What was missing from the article which I would have like address was if visitors are allowed to enter park, if so how many visitors per year and what visitors are allowed to do at the park. The article was fair and balance and did not feel like there was a agenda for the article for felt any bias in the article. What I did like the article mentioned the historical land usage by first nations tribes. References used in the article were from first nations website, Ojibway nation. This is great source when mentioning first nations information about the park historical importance. Other references were reliable being from Canadian and provincial websites. Structure for the article felt like a wall of text, would have needed more article heading about the animals and invasive species parts, it would be easier to digest the great information on the article. I would have like the invasive species part to have had a heading. The very beginning of the article was hard to understand because it was just a list of the reason for conducting studies on the park and reason for creating the park. The list at the beginning could have been reduced and simpler. Overall the general structure of the article is great, I have never heard of the park so some basic information is great. I learn marine park did not know parks could be marine being in BC always felt parks could be more terrestrial than marine but this article changed my perspective. I do think 5 question were answered in the article and did a good job disguising them ,it did not feel like a list of questions being answered. Like that the SARA was touch upon and first nations historical significance  was answered.