User:Mic-233/Fathom Five National Marine Park/Trustham02 Peer Review

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Fathom Five National Marine Park


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 * User:Mic-233/Fathom Five National Marine Park


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 * Fathom Five National Marine Park

Peer-Review
I found all the information about the invasive species to be very interesting. I enjoyed the information about the traditional use of the area by First Nations as well as the information about Monarch butterflies, I would keep these sections but clean up the grammar in the First Nations section as well as cite your sources. My favorite thing that I learned would be that mussels have the ability to filter water on a big enough scale that it effects the whole ecosystem and the organisms within it. You include information about species at risk, provided information about the issues/goals that led to the creation of the protected area, and information about traditional First Nations use; for full marks in the final submission I would try and touch on two more goals listed in the rubric. All the content in your sandbox seems accurate and precise but maybe add some more information about how Fathom Five National Marine Park is being protected or how these invasive species are being managed. Lots of words are being used to describe the different species within Fathom Five National Marine Park, I personally enjoyed it but some of it feels excessive for a wiki page about a park. Try adding more information about management strategies to balance the information. I can tell that there are sections but the section headers are missing. The article has good content but it needs the grammar reworked (with the exception of the Monarch butterfly portion). The article is written in a professional and neutral way by all authors. Your group might benefit from using more sources and gathering more info. The biggest issue with the article is that the large majority of it is uncited information, I don't think you'll be able to release the article as it is now without it getting taken down. Do First Nations play any role in the management or decision-making of this park? That could be an interesting perspective to research. Anyways nice work on the draft, I would focus on reworking the grammar and citing your uncited statements and data for the final submission. Good Luck ! Trustham02 (talk) 18:10, 19 October 2022 (UTC)