User:Mic Goodwill/Borrelia burgdorferi/YamsLeap Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mic Goodwill


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Borrelia burgdorferi


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Borrelia burgdorferi

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: The changes that were made to the lead paragraph help the reader gain a clearer understanding of the topic because it's more concise and flows better. Due to the lack of structure in the original text, the reader easily becomes distracted by all the information, but the writer does a good job narrowing the scope to Borrelia burgdorferi. Also, the writer provided more background information on the bacteria before introducing its importance in Lyme disease. Something that should be considered- other than Lyme disease, is this bacteria important in any other disease or area of study? Will this article lean more towards Lyme disease? If not, is there other information that would be important enough to briefly include in the lead paragraph?

The content added is neutral and well organized and the resources being used were reliable.