User:Micah6001/The Anabasis of Alexander/Eumulos Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Micah6001)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Micah6001/The Anabasis of Alexander


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Anabasis of Alexander

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The Changes made for clarity in this version of the lead are very effective at framing the story. Particularly the inclusion of how the framing of Xenophon's story effected the version of alexanders story

Article Body

You haven't edited the section on content but this could easily be split in separate sections that include more detail of the account. A section could also easily be added on xenophon and other greek authors impact on how the story of Alexander is told.

Criticism

This section is effective at describing faults in Arrians telling of Alexanders campaigns but could have specific examples from the text to demonstrate how he deifying alexander, or more direct paraphrasing of Historians on the same topic

Sources

The sources used here are appropriate

Overall

You've made some effective contributions to improve clarity, that would have good impact on the summary section. This article could use a lot of work in general so theres room for expansion to other sections or subsections.