User:MichKayla S/Alligator/Rca001 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(MichKayla S)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MichKayla S/Alligator


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Alligator

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I like the addition of the topic of digestion to the main alligator article, as it's an important topic to mention, and your wording and language fits well with that of the alligator article. I like that you don't have a dedicated lead section, as this is an addition to an existing article, but still give an introductory sentence that sums up your information. Your information is highly sourced, all of which are scientific literature and are up to date. Your addition of links to other articles allows the reader to access further information, but I believe this can also be done for words like "microorganisms" and "autophagy". In terms of organization, I would suggest that you start the sentence, "once and alligator's meal has been processed..." as a new paragraph, as the portion about CO2 and acidity seems worthy of its own section. A few grammar errors and changes I noticed are:

- "where the animal begins to consume its fat reserves to maintain its body until it can acquire a sufficient meal": Should there be a word like "weight" after body?

- "but can be attributed to both benefits and tolls to the animal.": I think you'd be better suited changing "tolls" to "costs"

- "Alligators also have highly folded mucosa in the lining the intestines to further aid in the absorption of nutrients.: Insert "of" after "lining"

I would also suggest the addition of a diagram or other media to better the reader's understanding of your information. Overall, I believe your addition of digestion to the alligator article greatly improves the page as a whole and highlights an important physiological aspect reader's would likely want to know about. Your information follows a logical pathway, and doesn't have any bias or goal in its presentation. Other than slight formatting changes and errors, I believe that you did a really good job!