User:Michael3468/Biological dispersal/Moose1917 Peer Review

General info
MBHeavyMetal Bubblybublik Michael3468/Biological dispersal
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Michael3468/Biological_dispersal?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Biological dispersal

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

This is a great lead section that keeps the concise and important information that is already in the article and builds upon it by adding the points that this group wants to follow up with. The underlined edits also make it clear as to where to the newer edits are, and is something that I think that other groups should start implementing as well! It is not overly detailed and adds information into the lead that was not previously there. The only edit here that I would make is to move up the newly added edits to after the sentence that ends in species distribution. This is because the lead is making a connection to habitats in that sentence, and then after the mention of dispersal, you go back to talking about the environment again. Of course, this like all other critiques are very optional.

Content

The content being added is highly relevant to the topic in my opinion. The added material is As we discuss the interactions between organisms and their environment, the inclusion of urban settings in biological dispersal would make the article more modern as well.

Tone and Balance

The tone of the added material is neutral, and builds upon where the article lacks on environmental interactions. The balance of the article on wikipedia is actually lacking immensely in my opinion on environmental stressors. Adding to the section "Environmental constraints" would coincide with the edits thus far, and go into where the article is lacking.

Sources and References

The listed sources adequately reflect the sections being worked on. In addition, the added sources by this group showcase detailed research that has gone into biological dispersal. The primary research in this topic is extensive, albeit construed, and would advise to work on sources that are not too niche. It would serve well to continue explaining the topic as you have done with things like anthropogenic effect and landscape genetics. The references to other articles is also great and will plan to incorporate this in my own edits.

Organization

The organization is the same as the actual article, other than the addition of a new subsection titled observational methods. As previously stated, the added content is concise and clear. There are no grammatical or spelling errors that I have noticed

Images and Media

There are no images added thus far. I would strongly suggest adding picures of two drastically different envioments (urban/rural) for the observational methods. A visual for the disperwal range would also help readers understand the points being made, especially as you discuss aquatic ranges as well which is much more different than spores in the air.

Overall Impressions

This is a great start to the project and I think that you can be a bit more bold in your future edits. Your edits thus far have improved the article undoubtedly. The environmental constrains section could be more concise with what is already written, and also discuss in heavy detail the ways that this applies to biological dispersal, as well as adding another example other than the Southern Rockhopper Penguins.