User:MichaelMarcucciWVU/String band/Emmadeitz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MichaelMarucciWVU


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MichaelMarcucciWVU/String band


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * String band

Evaluate the drafted changes
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I think that you have made some really good additions! The lead seems to be okay, I couldn't tell if anything was added to the lead but I personally think it is okay as is. I really like how you added in the "Joseph A. Ferko String Band" section, it adds information that I believe strengthens the article. I also liked how you added in what mummers are and added a little section about the topic because it isn't talked about much in the original article. The section about Philadelphia really helped the section that talked about it. Not much detail was given in the original article. As I looked through the sources they all seemed pretty reliable! The information seems to be organized in a well manner. The additions were written in a non- biased way and that is important. I would add some pictures so that the audience can visualize these instruments and the ideas.