User:Michael Cheng2/Mithridatic Wars/Garrettjaffe4 Peer Review

General Info:

Whose Article I am Reveiwing: Michael Cheng2

Link to Article I’m reviewing: https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Michael_Cheng2/Mithridatic_Wars

Link to original article: https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mithridatic_Wars

Prelude:

I thought it was good that you put in a “prelude” section about the causes and the lead ups to the war, taking the original really long, clunky, and over detailed lead and contextualing its importance in the article. Also good job here consolidating the original lead up section as it was very long and clunky before. You left the important information. My only critiques here are that Mabey you should make he fist sentence a little more formal and that there are a few sentences that could use a footnote.

First:

The first paragraph here could use some foot notes as well as the last sentence of the second paragraph. I am very impressed with your research and diversity of sources here as well as all of the detail that you go into. You use very nutureal langue that conveys a really in depth synypsious of the events in a more condensed fashion than the original.

Second:

Here is the same thing. You wrote in a very numeral and scholarly way but I think you need a few more citations here.

Third: Here you could mabey use a few more citations but the detail you went into and diversity of sources is very comprehensive. I like how you included emails of all of the imporatant figures and battles as well as the dates, as it lays put a clear chronological story.

Overview:

Overall really strong article and changes that you made. Lots of great and clear, non biased information. Like I said though maybe throw a few more citations on some of the statements.