User:MichaelaIanni/Agenda-setting theory/YOWtapper Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MichaelaIanni


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Agenda-setting theory, section is called Agenda setting and non-profit organizations


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Agenda-setting theory

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead was not updated, however the edit was an additional subparagraph in a section about the application of agenda-setting theory, and did not warrant an update to the lead.

Content

The added paragraph addressed a gap in the section about the application of agenda-setting. Other sections had discussed the application of agenda-setting within a wide-range of settings including commercial, political, advertising and health. The addition of a section about agenda-setting in a non-profit organization added to the topic. The added section is up to date as it gives examples of three recent natural disasters and explains the link between agenda-setting and donations to non-profit organizations. It cites a 2013 academic article about the subject.

Tone and Balance

The addition is written in a neutral tone with reference to a reputable source. This is an addition to a wider topic, so it brings an extra dimension to an existing article and fills a gap. The addition does not attempt to persuade the reader, except that the language chosen (such as "strong, positive, relationship...") does reflect a view point that is held by the reference material that is cited.

Sources and references

The new content cites an article from the Journal of Public Relations Research, and it does a good job of summarizing the long article into a few sentences. I noticed that there is an error in the citation of the author's name (Waters and not Walters). The link goes to a pay wall, but I was able to use the uOttawa Omni service to find the full article and read it.

Organization

Overall I found the addition good. In the first sentence, I found it somewhat unclear what was meant by "sudden cause" until I had read further. I infer that the author intend to mean a cause in the sense of an emergency situation that some people would feel moved to support. The sentence could be clearer if it explicitly stated this. As mentioned, the in-text citation needs to be corrected to Waters (2013).

Images and Media

There are no images or media with this page or this section that was added.

Overall impressions

This sub-section adds an extra dimension that is relevant to the greater article and which has current and useful citations. It could be stronger if it was written more explicitly, as currently the reader must read several sentences before being clear on the initial message.