User:MichelleCHsfsu/Seoul Station (film)/MarissaPAlit Peer Review

General info

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MichelleCHsfsu


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 * Sandbox Draft


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Seoul Station (film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section

The lead section provides the reader with an overview and concise details. It is brief yet inclusive of relevant information we see progress throughout the page. One can notice the modification in characters that the story centers--which differs from the original statement of two as opposed to three central characters. This shows that the peer discovered essential information to make the page a credible source to others researching the topic.

Content

The plot is quite extensive and abundant in context. I think it's quite an improvement from the original. The word count of the plot is 1,054 words. How to write a plot summary says the the word count generally ranges from 400-700 words. This range would allow the reader to stay focused while providing essential information. If in this draft the peer decides to modify the word count, there are many opportunities to condense the text, and still keep the strong and essential elements of the plot they currently provide.

Tone and Balance

The tone is neutral and no biases are found. The current balance of the page risks losing the reader. Readers in a hurry may see the lengthy plot and hope to find another source or section on the page that is shorter but contains the same information. However, the information the peer has provided is helpful to those who are looking to research "Seoul Station."

Sources and References

Sources seem relevant and updated.

Organization and writing quality

The article well-informs the reader of chronological main points. There are a couple of things I noticed that may or may not be intentional. "He finds her through her useless boyfriend, Ki-woong, who tried to pimped her to him," and "A homeless man walks around the Seoul Station area with his hand covering a bloody on his neck." I'm unsure about the second quote because a "bloody" could be a term used in the storyline unique to this plot. If that's the case, then it might be beneficial to state somewhere the terminology. If that isn't of interest to the peer, the writing quality is still clear, succinct, and scholarly.

Images and Media

The draft article does not include images or captions as of yet.

Talk Page Discussion

Talk page includes other peers who have given feedback.

Overall Impressions

I think the peer did a wonderful job in finding new information to contribute to the page. There are clear differences that show us the peer did modify the original content to be fuller and more informational.