User:Michelleho1100/Hunger in the United States/Abains1721 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Michelleho1100
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Michelleho1100/Hunger in the United States

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Yes

Content evaluation
Content added was insightful and informational.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?No

Tone and balance evaluation
Did a great job remaining neutral with various additions and balancing viewpoints.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Two sources have the same author, but otherwise diverse sources.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes, but it is a lot too read.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Not that I found
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Good use of sections. Colleges paragraph and while food pantries paragraph can be combined into one?

Organization evaluation
Your additions were concise, neutral, and well organized. I think the section could benefit from some editing of existing material. The Studies have examined paragraph in particular would benefit from being cut down into the same concise manner you utilize in the rest of the section.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The information added was comprehensive while remaining concise and drawing on sources.
 * How can the content added be improved? Some organizational aspects -- editing existing information in article to also be concise. Article ends on a semi-weak / awkward note with the SNAP federal policies and following sentence. Feels as if these sentences belong elsewhere, or need to be clarified to make the section conclusion stronger.

Overall evaluation
Great information and content base, next steps focusing on organization a bit to just clean up the edges.