User:Mikamek1/1995 strikes in France/Cyngao Peer Review

General info
Mikamek1
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I like the added background context that your Sandbox draft provides for the article. However, it's unclear where the blurb that you've written is meant to fit in the original article. I think the main shortcoming of the paragraph is that the sentence structure and grammar are a little bit difficult to read: the first sentence is very long-winded and could be split into two shorter sentences. The punctuation is a little bit off throughout the paragraph as well.

Overall, the drafted paragraph would help to build the article content since currently the official article lacks the information that you're adding. Please remember to add citations and read it over a few times to improve the syntax- after that it looks like it will be ready for publishing!