User:Mikeefarrar/Sport communication/Laurengordon4 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the second sentence in the lead needs to be brown up into 2 sentences. although I understand what it is saying. I think it may be hard for some to read.

In the second part talking about the careers, I would explain a little bit more on the connection and how this is a career. I think the second part to this section will flow nicely with a little more explanation. Overall I feel like this is going to be a good contribution.