User:Mil3096/Jane J. Robinson/AmoderateDflatmajor Peer Review

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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Jane J. Robinson

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The lead you have does a great job of expanding on the lead in the live article, you've greatly increased the information present. I think that you could delete some of the links/citations and cite them using the Wikipedia tool to make the citations more consistent across the page. I also suggest, unless I'm misunderstanding, putting "née Johnson" instead of "formally known as Jane Johnson." For the Contributions/Involvement section, I think either Involvement or Career would be a good title. For any particularly notable contributions, you could make a subheading and write a paragraph just about that contribution. This is a nitpick, but in the last sentence of the first life paragraph, the phrase "went on" is used twice; finding some other way to phrase this would increase readability. Considering the format of Wikipedia, the bullet points in the Contributions/Involvement section should probably be formatted into prose. Overall, I think you have a lot of good information here, and a good draft, it just needs to be formatted a little more to be consistent with Wikipedia.