User:Milenaphilips/Endeavour Hydrothermal Vents/Ayushr24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Milenaphilips


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Milenaphilips/Endeavour_Hydrothermal_Vents?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article is well-organized in sections to give the reader a concise layout to understand the article. The article is heavily detail oriented and has many citation to support the mentioned details. The author also uses a multitude of hyperlinks within the paragraph to ensure the reader has quick access to the definition of a specific phrase or word. Considering that the content has a lot of scientific processes and terminology used, the hyperlinks are a convenient tool used to keep the readers attention regardless of the advanced jargon. Though the author has used bold titles for the subtitles instead of the main headings which takes the attention away from the heading of the sub-paragraphs. Unless the intention of the author is to draw more attention to the sub-headings then bolding it would be appropriate. The tone of the article is neutral as it is a representation of fact-based earth seismic process and their effects on there ecosystem. The article can incorporate visual representations of the processes that are described to give the reader a fuller picture. Moreover, the author does not seem to have a bias as every point that has been made is cited by a relevant resource. The sentence structure of the article is slightly lengthy and wordy for the reader to interpret. Shorter sentences would be able to deliver a better understanding of the content. Though majority of the long sentences are explaining scientific processes and are difficult to cut due to its attached complexity.

Overall, the article efficiently informs the reader about Endeavour hypothermal vents and their function with appropriate examples and citations.