User:Milenaphilips/Endeavour Hydrothermal Vents/Kyrastewart Peer Review

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Milenaphilips


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 * Endeavour Hydrothermal Vents
 * Endeavour Hydrothermal Vents

Evaluate the drafted changes
I find the article targets the organisms and structure of the vents in great detail. The Biodiversity and Marine protected area designation and expeditions are excellent examples of the organization and strong information that helped develop this article. I learned about endemic species, microorganisms, mammals, invertebrates, and the classification of vents. I could only find a few topics covered about what species are found in the protected area, any species that are endemic, and a slight touch on the management. Try to cover how and why the site is protected, its historical use, climate change, management, and if any relation to First Nations. The lead contains an introduction but no overview of the topics in the article. The order of Thermal biology, chemical ecology, and temperature needs to be in more relevant order. Chemical ecology lacks information, and the fluidity of Fluid fluxes and chemistry needs improvement. It isn't easy to understand what you want to say, so try going into more detail. I feel like you can expand on MPA and NEPTUNE, its purpose, and how the protection of the vents was executed. The content has accurate grammar but requires better content organization within each paragraph and the topics. I am still confused about the vents' function and how they inhabit the species living there. An image of the vents and a map of the location would help increase the quality of the article. There are many academic sources to back up the claims, which shows research is deep and accurate. The tone is neutral and acceptable to Wikipedia's guidelines. I suggest removing transition phrases to keep sentence framing straight to the point. Add more relevant perspectives to make the article stronger and eliminate any bias. For example, add these neglected viewpoints in the why for management and protection. Overall, the wiring is in a civil, kind, and helpful tone, but it needs more work in including more topics, detail, and organization to make it a stronger article.