User:Milessilber/Sepiidae/Fzhan2203 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Milessilber


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Milessilber/Sepiidae?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sepiidae

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer Review of Sepiidae

Lead


 * Have a lead section in the beginning to introduce all the major sections in the article, i.e. brief description of each section with summary sentences
 * This might be the Sepiidae section you have at the beginning so just add on to that.
 * This section needs to be able to provide the reader of a quick overview of the article, so that the reader can get a sense of it before reading further.
 * Introductory sentence needed, to describe the Sepiidae family.
 * Include in-text citations and cite it in references section in APA format

Article Body


 * In the Sepiidae section -- >
 * Add the classifications (kingdom, phylum, class, etc.)
 * Try to find a study on why the species that "live in greater depths have a thicker septa and less space between pillars in their cuttlebones" --> is it an adaptation to help it survive in deeper waters with higher pressure and lower temperatures?


 * In the habitat section -->
 * Describe benthic taxon--> should be described in terms where new readers to the topic can understand without additional research, can also link "benthic" to another article if it is available
 * Maybe describe the water temperature it prefers and how they migrate if temp increases or decreases if there are articles on that; and the water temp that initiates the mating season
 * In the reproduction section -->
 * Describe how the species reproduce --> if they lay eggs and where do they lay etc.
 * Describe more about what you mean when you say "scrape away sperm from female" it is not totally clear what that means
 * How does the "head-to-head" arrangement protect the organisms while they mate? --> does it protect the sexual organs or are their heads used to deter predators?
 * Describe how often they mate and if they migrate to different parts or depths to mate
 * In the diet section -->
 * Talk about maybe how the newborn species feed, if the parent helps feed or if they are on their own (could be made into new section titled "offspring survival" if desired)
 * Potential section to add: classification/taxonomy, predators and prey, life span, anatomy - internal/external, mating behavior/preferences, distinct characteristics, cuttlebone

Resources --> add in-text citations in APA format and have a resources section in APA with links to each source if applicable.

Overall, the article has a great foundation, the tone is neutral and everything is on topic in each section. It does a good job introducing the Sepiidae family to a reader who has no idea on the topic, but more in-depth details may be needed for full understanding. Also try to balance each section in terms of it's importance, i.e. if one section has more research and studies done and is more important, it should be longer and have more details than a section that is less important. It appears all of your sections are about equal at this point.

Peer reviewed by Frank Zhan