User:Millie Deroy/Aquamarine (gem)/Brettellier Peer Review

General info
Millie Deroy
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Millie%20Deroy/Aquamarine_%28gem%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Aquamarine (gem)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

I think the lead is very well-written. It effectively provides facts and information about the aquamarine gem while simultaneously touching on the specific subjects that are included later in the article. I noticed some of the citations didn't transfer over from the original article. I'm not sure whether that was intentional or not but I thought it would be good to point out just in case.

My only criticism for the lead is that the deep blue variant maxixe, is mentioned and discussed with a bit of depth in this paragraph but then not mentioned anywhere else in the article. I'm not sure how much more information there is on maxixe but it may be worth moving that section of the lead to it's own section in the body of the article.

Content

I really like the variety of subjects covered in the article. Several, relevant yet different subjects are included in the article which makes for a good, descriptive article about aquamarine.

For the value subject specifically, I was interested to know why naturally blue hued aquamarine specimens are more valuable than those that have undergone heat treatment. Is there a physical property that naturally blue hued aquamarine specimens have that heat treated aquamarines simply can't achieve or is it simply because we can easily heat treat aquamarines to make them blue hued whereas naturally occurring is much more rare. Regardless, it might be worth mentioning how someone could tell the difference between heat treated vs. naturally occurring blue hued aquamarine specimens.

For in culture, I had a couple thoughts for potential subjects to add as well. I feel that a list or even a few examples of famous artifacts/jewelry pieces that contain aquamarine gems in them would be very interesting. I see that on the original article there's a picture of Queen Elizabeth II wearing Brazilian aquamarine jewelry, perhaps more examples like this could be added.

I was also thinking that you could add some information about any utility aquamarine might have, whether this is in a new section entirely or included under in culture. I noticed the article has a couple sentences saying what the Chinese and Japanese have used aquamarine gems for, perhaps delving further into that could help add some extra content to that section or to the article.

Tone and Balance

I feel your article is very balanced and contains little to no bias at all. The information presented is all very fact based and therefor doesn't leave much room for personal tone/bias which is great!

Sources and References

The sources you added are very good. They are all for the most-part up-to-date, scholarly, and reliable articles. All the links work and took me directly to the source. The only article I think is worth bringing up is the "Firefly Guide to Gems" which only stood out to me because it's from 2003 so it could be worth finding a relatively more up-to-date source for that information. That being said, I recognize that not much has probably changed with aquamarine gems since 2003 so I wouldn't say finding a better source for that information is a necessity by any means.

Organization

I find your article to be very well organized. Everything is under it's own header and there's no information that I feel belongs under a different header/subject. My only criticism in terms of structure/organization is what I mentioned previously with the lead article which was the maxixe section of the lead article which I feel could be moved to it's own section or discussed further in it's own section later in the article.

Images and Media

The images didn't copy over to your rough draft but I'd assume you weren't planning to remove them so I'll continue my review with that assumption. The images added are very helpful to the information presented with them. The captions are well-written and informative as well. I like that next to the table describing notable examples of aquamarine specimens, there's a picture of another notable specimen. That being said, It could be worth adding that specimen to the table if there's enough information to be found on it. Also, as previously mentioned, I like the inclusion of Queen Elizabeth II wearing jewelry that contained large aquamarine gems.