User:Mimidargan11/Crime in Israel/Clmalloy123 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Mimidargan11
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Crime in Israel
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
After first reading the pre-existing article on Crime in Israel, I had some ideas on what could be added/edited. I think Mimi's table of contents has a great format and layout, and will most certainly contribute educational and new ideas to the article. I like that she added at least two sub-sub-headings to the already existing subheadings, I think this will add more depth to the article. I also like her idea of incorporating the examination and analysis of hierarchies and how they impact organized crime in Israel. I also am impressed by all the different sub-sections she came up with, as I think all of them are interesting and broad yet specific enough to add beneficial information to the article.

I feel as if you could maybe drop the "More information" heading at the end as there is already a ton of information throughout the article, maybe even too much for an entire other section on additional information. Otherwise and overall I think her plans with the article are admirable and I'm most certainly excited to come back and read when she's completed her edits.

Peer Review 2
After peer reviewing this article for a second time, It seems to me that the author has come up with innovative and exciting ideas to add to the article. The table of contents is precise and clear yet has a lot of information and data. I think that the only thing the author really needs to do is get started on writing/editing in the sandbox, so we can see her ideas come to life. Overall I think it's going to be great and I'm excited to see the final draft.