User:Minaloves93/sandbox

Marina's Work Log
Oct 5. Read through my article and noticed that there where certain spots that needed to be properly cited and rewritten. (1 hour)

Oct 6. Decided to change my article, I chose musician Matt Redman. I read through the article and chose some references to use to improve it. I noticed some minor editing that needed to take places and clicked on references they had listed and noticed some dead ends that needed to be removed. I made a check list of things that I want to work on for this article.(2 hours)

Oct 20. I haven't been able to work much on my article this week due to my daughter being hospitalized, I looked over the section "personal life" and tried to make notes of what I wanted to add to it but I didn't get much further than that. I hope that this next week I can make a significant amount of editing to make up for this past week! (15 mins)

Oct 27. Added more information to "Personal Life" and added another book to his list of writings. (1.5 hours)

Nov 1. I realized that I have been doing this all wrong, I thought what I was working on was the edit page and apparently I have been specifically editing the main article it's self. I am not sure where I went wrong and I am going over the training's to retrace my steps. Sorry! (45 min)

Nov 3. I am still not sure if I am doing this right, I moved everything that I added from Personal Life and from Writings From the main article page back into the Sandbox. Worked on adding more to his writing section and I added all I could find about his personal life. (2 hours)

Heather's Comments
10/2- Good work. Can you please write a short evaluation of Gerry McAvoy page. What do you think you'll change and how? What do you need to omit, reorganize or rewrite? I recommend using this handout to guide you: https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/9/96/Evaluating_Wikipedia_brochure_%28Wiki_Education_Foundation%29.pdf

10/15- Very nice work finding a new article! Cross-checking current references for plagiarism is great! Remember Wikipedia needs you to completely change the structure of the original text to use it in an article without plagiarizing. I'm not sure what "unnecessary quotations" you found. Can you say more? It looks to me like "personal life" could be more developed. You could also add a bit about each his writings--what are they about and how were they received? Did they sell many copies? Keep it up!

11/1- What, specifically, did you add to "Personal Life"? I don't see any edits on the main page and I don't see them here either. Be sure I or a WikiTech looks them over before you move them to main space this Sunday.

Article Editing
(From Personal Life) Redman was born and raised in Watford, England. The family had moved to a small commuter town named Chorleywood when he was around the age of two. His father passed away when he was just seven years old, and he and his brother were raised predominantly by his mother. His mother later remarried into an abusive relationship that took a great deal on the family. At the age of 10 he was told the real reason his father had passed away, his father suffered from a serious mental illness that evidently took his life. He converted to Christianity at the age of 10, after attending a mission service by Luis Palau at London's QPR football stadium and was encouraged by Mike Pilavachi, an Anglican Church youth leader to lead worship in his teens.

He married Beth Redman, who was also a songwriter and author. The couple has five children and resides in California.

(From Writings) He has authored and edited multiple books on Christian worship, including The Unquenchable Worshipper and the book Facedown which accompanied the album of the same name. His book Mirror Ball relays his thoughts and experiences of "living boldly and shining brightly for the glory of God." He and his wife co-wrote the book titled "Blessed Be Your Name" with the hopes to bring others to trust God and his goodness, no matter the circumstance.

About my article
After looking and reading through this article I noticed that there were some unnecessary quotations which I will be deleting. I want to add more information about him as an author and more about his personal life. The article looks well written and there were just some minor rephrasing and adding that needed to happen. The article listed over 20 references and I will more than likely be cross checking all of the information to make sure there isn't any unintentional plagiarism.

some references I will be using include:

https://www.newreleasetoday.com/artistdetail.php?artist_id=231

https://www.learnreligions.com/matt-redman-biography-709700

https://www1.cbn.com/700club/matt-redman