User:MinervaNix/Isocrates/IvanTheVegan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MinervaNix


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MinervaNix/Isocrates


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Isocrates

Evaluate the drafted changes
Praises:


 * I like the idea of expanding the family section. As it stands, it is still quite modest
 * The info for your paragraphs are robust and relevant to the topic at hand
 * Edit ideas have room for a lot of extra info previously not included into the page
 * Including a late marriage previously unmentioned is a GREAT inclusion Critique:  I think you have chosen some really great areas for expansions of the article. You have room to expand on areas previously not mentioned and the focus on personal life rather than just his philosophy should be refreshing for the page. I wonder if there are good primary sources to look into that are previously untapped as well. That can be an amazing addition to the article as well. Perhaps the Britannica source has links to the primary sources in question?