User:Minhle90/Popliteal artery entrapment syndrome/EVLeDO Peer Review

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Minhle90


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Popliteal artery entrapment syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello, friend. I was assigned to review your article on Popliteal Artery Entrapment Syndrome. You did a great job fleshing out the entire latter half of the article. I especially appreciate the attention to the classification section and the explanations added to the differentials. I've included my thoughts below, listed by section so they're easier to find. Please let me know if I've written anything that is difficult to understand and I'll be happy to clarify.

Lead


 * Consider adding brackets (  ) to link the following articles: claudication, ischemia, aneurysm, CT scan, magnetic resonance angiography, and duplex ultrasonography


 * There are no references for this section (referring to the little number superscripts).


 * Sentence 3 about youth vs elderlies is a little confusing. I'm not sure if this means that young athletes are at greater risk than the elderly, or if these groups are the most likely to get the condition compared to the general population


 * Sentence 6 about management: changing "opening" to "open" might make more sense.

History


 * Consider rewriting the first sentence, because it is a little clunky to read as is. Maybe something like: "In 1879, the syndrome was first described in a 64-year-old male by a medical student named Anderson Stuart.”

Epidemiology


 * Sentence 4, 5, 6 about predilection could be rewritten with a simpler word to be easier understood. Something like, "this condition is 15 times more likely to occur in males. However, this may be an overestimation due to differences in physical activity levels and disproportionate representation of males in test subjects. Athletes participating in running, soccer, football, basketball, or rugby are at an increased risk."


 * Consider starting a new paragraph within this section for the portion about embryonic development

Pathophysiology and classification


 * Sentence 3 can be simplified with "muscle position", instead of "of the position of the muscle"


 * Consider adding brackets (  ) to link the following articles: microtrauma, fibrosis


 * The sentence about the new classification system introduced by Heidelberg: I would change "is" to "was"


 * Type 3 at the bottom: I would change "presented" to "present"

Medical history and physical examination


 * Last sentence: I would change "may be" to "may show" or "may reveal".

Diagnosis


 * You can check to see if any of the differentials have articles that can be linked via brackets.

Evaluation


 * Consider adding brackets (  ) to link the following articles: Digital subtraction angiography


 * Want to double check if it's digital substruction vs digital subtraction, ankle-brachial index


 * 1st sentence of second paragraph: "A provocative maneuver" or "Provocative maneuvers" for better grammar


 * "improve presentation of PAES on imaging" can be changed to "improve the visualization"


 * 2nd sentence 2nd paragraph: "forceful plantarflexion" can be changed to "forcefully plantarflex"


 * add comma after "post-stenotic dilation"


 * Last sentence is a little confusing to read. I would change to something like: "During a dynamic CT, initial images are taken with the patient still. Further images are taken following a series of provocative maneuvers."

Management


 * Consider adding brackets (  ) to link the following articles: expectant management (watchful waiting article, i believe)


 * Asymptomatic patients: Change "accidentally on imagings" to "incidentally on imaging"


 * Symptomatic patients: changing "opening" to "open" might make more sense.


 * Sentence about surgical approaches, I would rewrite as, "The surgery can be performed with a posterior or medial approach", instead of medical approach


 * Next sentence: change to "a previous study" or "previous studies", change medical to medial

Complications of untreated PAES


 * Last sentence: I would change "rare to be seen" to "rarely seen, even in..."

References


 * I have nothing to add or change here.

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