User:Minhokorea/Mirocaris/FloppingFish Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?)

Minho (minhokorea)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Minhokorea/Mirocaris?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template) (reproductive biology section)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mirocaris

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead

Lead of the article is sound overall, the only sentence that is slightly confusing is "Sometimes considered the only genus of the family Mirocarididae, Mirocaris is usually placed in the family Alvinocarididae." I would consider rephrasing this to be more clear as to why this confusion in classification is the case.


 * Content

The content added to the Reproductive Biology section is insightful, and follows the Wikipedia guidelines of being unbiased. Only one source is used in this section, which would normally be problematic but I suspect that there is not a lot of research papers on Mirocaris reproduction so it is understandable.


 * Tone and Balance

As mentioned before, the content added is not biased in any way but rather compiled in an informative manner. There is no persuasiveness or leading the reader to make a certain conclusion, the content is just synthesized information which makes it up to the reader to extract knowledge from it.


 * Sources and References

Also mentioned before, only one source is used in this section but it is a reliable source that is relatively up to date (2006). Another source or two would vastly strengthen this portion of the article, even if it is not directly about Mirocaris shrimp (it could be about another vent shrimp's reproduction so you can compare the two or something like that). The link for the article works well.


 * Organization

The content is well-organized, grammatically correct, and flows smoothly. The only suggestion I would have here is to find a better transition sentence/introductory sentence at the beginning of your section. This "The ovaries of a female M. fortunata are situated behind and below the carapace" seems like a very blunt start to the section which without context (people scrolling down just to see the reproduction section) could disinterest the reader. Perhaps start with a sentence about how much is known about Mirocaris reproduction or how unique it is or something to pull the reader in before laying the scientific facts. Or simply state what type of reproductive method Mirocaris shrimp use, for example for mine I stated that Viperfish reproduce through spawning. Also, make sure to add some more hyperlinks (perhaps on carapace and fecundity, for example, since some people might need more context on that).


 * Images and Media

There are no images or media included in this section (don't think it is necessary).


 * Overall Impressions

Overall, I think this section of the article is strong and well-written. I think a little bit more general info on how they reproduce would strengthen the section a lot. I personally don't think mentioning the size of the oocytes is necessary, especially since the sentence is repetitive -

"At this stage, the oocytes are typically 25-30 µm. The oocytes then undergo a process of meiosis, splitting the diploid (2n) oocyte into a haploid (n) cell. At this stage, the oocytes are typically 85-95 µm.

- This can probably either be compounded into one sentence or removed entirely (not the middle sentence since that is insightful/necessary).

Great job Minho! I think if you implement some of these suggestions you'll have a great article on your hands!

- Federico (FloppingFish)