User:Minikiwis/Ehrlichiosis/Fanman1999 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Minikiwis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Minikiwis/Ehrlichiosis


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ehrlichiosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead for the article is a concise graph of just a general overview of the disease and some of the signs/symptoms. It provides the audience with some brief knowledge before going in depth and is good for people that skipped the beginning parts of the article.

Content:

The article body is relevant to the content in the article and provides the audience with more incite into the specific number of cases and geography of said cases. If I were to make a suggestion, I would suggest adding(if you can find one) a study done to determine how rare it is for symptoms of Ehrlichiosis to progress and the ratio of cases hospitalized/not hospitalized. I feel like adding this would provide the audience with a more concrete idea of how severe this disease can be if left untreated.

Tone and Balance:

The content added is neutral and does not seem to take a stance on the article. If I were to nitpick at something, I would say describing the symptoms again in the body is a bit overrepresented and can be taken out as the lead had a graph with the symptoms already displayed.

Source and References:

The sources used for this edit are indeed reliable and a valid secondary source.

Images and Media:

The graph in the beginning of the edit works well in introducing the topic to the reader and then expands upon it in the body.