User:Mirandamc/Appalousa/Josetg23 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mirandamc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mirandamc/Appalousa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Appalousa

Evaluate the drafted changes
This Article seems well researched and sufficiently filled with the correct direction for each topic. The lead paragraph does a good job at describing the topic; I would suggest having a strong topic sentence to really let the reader know what the article is about. The overall article has sufficient content and flows together pretty well within each respective section. There are some spots where I don't see citation where I would assume would need a citation but I think most of the important references are apparent. The writing style sounds pretty wikipedia-esque although there are few places where I would suggest refraining from using personal pronouns like I he/her and instead indentifying who you are referring to directly (ex: change "he says ..." to "____ says" ). There's no images in the article yet but I can assume that images were not a priority for the article at this moment. I think the direction for this article is going by very well. Good job.