User:Mirandawesley/Postpartum depression/Maeve26 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mirandawesley


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mirandawesley/Postpartum_depression?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Postpartum depression

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall impressions: This is a really great draft! You did a good job of adding a lot of new and important information that filled a previous gap in the article. It also appears that you found a lot of really great, reliable sources to use for your additions. I think you're most of the way towards your final draft, I've included some suggestions for smaller edits below.

1) One important but minor edit to make is to put the acronyms for the programs you mention in parenthesis after they are written out the first time. (ex: "Infant and Early Childhood Mental Health Consultation center" should be followed by (IECMH)

2) "Statistics estimate that of the roughly 75 percent of mothers experiencing depression, 38 percent were put in contact with a healthcare professional for treatment." Is this specific to the consultation service you mentioned before or just in general? If it's just a general statistic, it seems a bit out of place there.

3) I really like the psychotherapy subsection, but I think it might fit in better if it was incorporated in the therapy subsection of treatments. Since it's a medical resource rather than a support group, education, or other community/government provided program it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the things in the resources section.

4) Not necessary, but it might be nice to add some other examples of books or media that discuss PPD in the personal narratives section.

5) Make sure you are consistent with how you do your citations for the final draft.

6) I'm not sure if you have decided where in the article you're going to add this section, but my thoughts are that it might fit best after the treatments subsection. Just a suggestion though, so there are definitely other places you could add it!