User:MisaPerez99/User:Litzyg27/Arnoldo Vargas/MisaPerez99 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Litzyg27


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Litzyg27/Arnoldo Vargas


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.

Peer Review by MisaPerez99

 * The introductory portion of this first draft article is presented in the way that you would expect. We see who the artist is, where he is from and what he does.
 * There is a good balance when providing information, the details are there, but the overall biography of the artist still needs to expand.
 * Content - The content within the article fits with the headings provided.
 * One concern is with the heading "Arnoldo Vargas", which I assume is the biography of the artist, I would suggest to change the heading to "Biography".
 * Content such as the career, artwork etc. is still needed but that will come when the writing process of this article is in its later stages.
 * Exhibitions listed are shown to have a good range of timeline, work as recent as 2012.


 * Tone and Balance - Good tone of neutrality when presenting the information, feels like a real Wikipedia article. It is straight to the point, we see the details and the main points.
 * No type persuasion is shown, we are presented with factual information with no intent to persuade, simply to inform.
 * We only get a small portion of facts that are represented, as mentioned before, it still feels that this draft is still in its beginning stages.
 * Sources and References - I would suggest citing information for the schools that the artist attended, readers may want to view the schools and this is something that Wikipedia articles include.
 * Citing and bibliographies are missing in this article, I am unable to see if the any cited work is reliable.
 * Organization - The content is easy to read, it just needs to be expanded throughout the rest of the article.
 * Overall Impressions - The article still needs work done to provide a further review, I really enjoyed reading the work that was provided at this moment.
 * Looking over Litzy's article, one aspect that appealed to me was the usage of tables. A simple and direct way to get the information out there about any subject is being used here.
 * The addition of the table makes a good idea for my own personal article for my artist.