User:Mitsuo500/Commodification/Vsiguenza Peer Review

Terry Response 11/29/23:
Vsiguenza, Thank for the timely and complimentary review of my work. I felt the Commodification topic was a good article to understand the process of editing Wikipedia. I had Dr. King look at my editing of the article so far, and she suggested a little more discussion of Commodification but overall, it’s in good shape. I like the idea of adding influencers to self-commodification (I had thought about it, and was worried about time to find articles, it’s important and timely so I’ll find something) and I should have time to expand Hispanic/Asian communities’ commodification. I can add NYE and Easter pictures to round out the Holidays’ commodification. Thanks!

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The lead has been updated with more details describing commodification as a capitalist system. It is concise and explains in succinct detail what commodities are by definition. The lead does not include a brief section laying out the major sections of the article. However, I would argue that it is not necessary. The added content is relevant to the topic such as the commodification theory and how it is applied to elitist culture in the U.S. The content seems timeless such as the implementation of the holiday photos that depict the capitalistic society we are anchored in. I would suggest to expand on the subculture subhead and lay out definitions of each that readers may not know about. The article does deal with Wikipedia's equity gaps such as the Indigenous cultures' fight for ownership over their heritage and traditions that are being wrongfully westernized. It might be worth investigating other ethnic cultures in the Hispanic/Asian communities and how their products have been commodified. The content does read neutral. The implementation of media as commodification is a great example that can be expanded on a bit more. The content does not appear to sway the reader in any particular direction. The sources derive from a spectrum of various authors, fairly updated journal articles, and the content is backed up by a reliable second source of information. The content is easy to digest and is well organized. As mentioned before there could be additions of subheads under the "subcultures" head and examples of "internet and online communities." The article does include complementary images. Perhaps alongside the holiday head there can be a photo for Easter and New Year's Eve. For the photo caption labeled "Bell Hooks," it might be helpful to briefly explain who she is and her contributions. The list of sources are exhaustive and represent the literature on commodification. The content added has provided more perspective to commodification. I would suggest to add more literature from journal articles that discuss the commodification of other ethnic cultures to create a well-rounded Wiki article. Also, the self-commodification tab can incorporate more content related to social media influencers and how they rake in cash from viewership and high engagement with their posts. This article is being fleshed out nicely!