User:Mjeffery97/Color psychology/Deswilliams22 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mjeffrey97


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Color psychology


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Color psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey! I saw your bibliography but I can't see any of your revisions to the article. If you need some guidance, I'd look into revamping the Introduction of this page. As I was reading, the focus shifted from being a brief overview of the article to being more focused on the history and the marketing of color psychology. For example you could re-word these two sentences:

"Carl Jung has been credited as one of the pioneers in this field for his explorations into the properties and meanings of colors in our lives. Jung is quoted for saying, "colours are the mother tongue of the subconscious". "

I'd personally take these sentences out and put them in the history section that is expounding on Jung's efforts to color psychology or word it like this: "Carl Jung, one of the pioneers of color psychology, believed that it was "the mother tongue of the subconscious". I feel that reads better without shifting my focus completely to the efforts of Carl Jung so early.

As far as the second paragraph is concerned, I don't think it is a bad paragraph. I think it would serve a better purpose under the "Uses in Marketing" section of the page. It throws off the introduction completely in my opinion.

Hope these suggestions help!