User:Mjk388/Toba-Maskoy language/Manny.Rod1029 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mjk388


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mjk388/Toba-Maskoy language
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead is quite short but provides the relevant information necessary to give the reader some background information on the language. On of the sources is a bit old but it provides relevant information. The lead has the necessary information to build the rest of the page on such as the amount of speakers and where the language is from.

Content:

The content that was presented was short but factual information that needs to be developed more to produce a more in depth and resourceful article. The content definitely helps to bridge a gap that is presented in the world but it just needs to be updated more.

Tone and Balance:

The tone is clear and concise with no evidence of an attempt to persuade the reader in any way and presents the information unbiased.

Sources and references:

The sources are reliable and do come from peer reviewed journals but within the lead I would recommend that you change the format of your in text citation with the footnote format to make it easier to track which part of the text uses which specific citation. The links do work for most of the references but for a couple it just shows the article information but not a link that takes you to the article.

Organization:

The information is presented in an easy to follow format but it has minimal information so far past the lead. The page is broken down into clear subheadings that show what they will be talking about the page is limited so far by the amount of information presented

Media:

The video linked isn't relevant to the article other than the fact that it is spoken in the Toba-Maskoy Language. Currently the article would be better without the video linked at the bottom

Overall Impressions:

The article is good overall but it just needs to be updated with more information. The breakdown of the information is organized well but it is just bare for the most part now. Grammar wise the only suggestion I will make is that the last three sentences of the lead paragraph can be combined to form 2 sentences by implementing the short middle sentence into one of the two surrounding sentences.