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Instructor feedback
- edit: "Innogen/Imogen's husband, adopted and raised by King Cymbeline, who disapproves of the marriage"

- cut: "He works closely with the Queen and gives her sleeping drugs to the Queen out of distrust that develops"

- edit: "banished lord living under the name Morgan, who stole King Cymbeline's infant sons as retaliation for his banishment"

- cut: "; he unknowingly gives a sleeping drug to Imogen, believing this drug to be medicine from the Queen"

- this citation is not functional: "production in New York City directed by Andrei Șerban.[1] "

- play title needs italicization here: "directed Cymbeline at the"

- this citation is not functional: "Gillian Bevan as Cymbeline.[3] "

- fix Oregon Shakespeare Festival reference (broken link)

- should be "Based on the historical King of Britain, Cunobeline, and father to Imogen"

- cut "who encourages his daughter to marry Cloten."

- "2004 and 2014" (write out ampersand)

- cut "/Disney"

- should be "married to a rancher, with Imogen"

Annabel :
Posthumus - Innogen/Imogen's husband, adopted and raised by King Cymbeline, who disapproves of the marriage.

Cornelius - King Cymbeline's court physician.

Performance History

Also in 2013, a folk musical adaptation of Cymbeline was performed at the First Folio Theatre in Oak Brook, Illinois.[70] This particular production incorporated the patriarchal themes into a southern Civil War setting, where Cymbeline himself is a man of high status who avoids military service in the war. The play was performed outdoors and was accompanied by traditional Appalachian folk songs.

Elizabeth
Characters

Belarius – banished lord living under the name Morgan, who stole King Cymbeline's infant sons as an act of retaliation for his banishment

Pisanio – Posthumus' servant, loyal to both Posthumus and Imogen

Synopsis

the British Throne

He also takes note of the room, as well as the mole on Imogen's partly naked body, to be able to present false evidence to Posthumus that he has seduced his bride.

Performance History

There have been some well-received theatrical productions including the Public Theater's 1998 production in New York City, directed by Andrei Șerban.

Cymbeline was also performed at the Cambridge Arts Theatre in October 2007 in a production directed by Sir Trevor Nunn.

In 2016, Melly Still directed Cymbeline at the Royal Shakespeare Company. This version of the play was performed at the Royal Shakespeare Theatre before moving to the Barbican in late 2016. The performance featured Bethan Cullinane as Innogen and Gillian Bevan as Cymbeline.

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Cameryn
Iachimo, a Roman lord and friend to Philario

Jupiter, King of the gods in Roman Mythology

* will replace "otherwise honorable man" in synopsis with more neutral description of Posthumus*

Performance History

The play was again at Stratford in 2005, directed by David Latham. A large medieval tapestry unified the fairly simple stage design and underscored Latham's fairy-tale inspired direction.

The play was included in the 2013 repertory season of the Oregon Shakespeare Festival.

Mariam
Characters:

The Queen – Cymbeline's second wife and mother to Cloten.

Cloten – Prince of Britain, Queen's son by a former husband and step-brother to Imogen.

Cymbeline – Based off the historical King of Britain, Cunobeline, and father to Imogen.

Performance History

In 2004 and 2014, the Hudson Shakespeare Company of New Jersey produced two distinct versions of the play. The 2004 production, directed by Jon Ciccarelli, embraced the fairy tale aspect of the story and produced a colorful version with wicked step mothers, feisty princesses and a campy Iachimo. The 2014 version, directed by Rachel Alt, went in a completely opposite direction and placed the action on ranch in the American old west. The Queen was a southern belle married to a rancher, with Imogen as a high society girl in love with the cowhand Posthumous.

In 2011, the Shakespeare Theatre Company of Washington, DC, presented a version of the play that emphasized its fable and folklore elements, set as a tale within a tale, as told to a child.

In 2012, Antoni Cimolino directed a production at the Stratford Festival that steered into the fairy-tale elements of the text.

Possible Changes that Could Be Made (Courtesy of Elizabeth):

Hey guys, I think we should definitely have all the first letters of all the descriptions capitalized (unless its a name or a title like king or prince) because that's what all the other descriptions on the Cymbeline article look like. Also we should all use the same dash line '–' after the characters names. I also made some minor changes to character descriptions if I thought info needed to be added or removed or clarified, but feel free to ignore my changes if you disagree with any of them.

Posthumus – an orphan adopted and raised by King Cymbeline; he is Imogen's husband but their marriage is disapproved by Cymbeline.

Cornelius – court physician; he offers the Queen a sleeping drug out of distrust that develops

Iachimo –  a Roman lord and friend to Philario; makes a wager with Posthumus over Imogen's fidelity

Jupiter – King of the gods in Roman Mythology

The Queen – Cymbeline's second wife and mother to Cloten.

Cloten – Prince of Britain, Queen's son by a former husband and step-brother to Imogen.

Cymbeline – based off the historical King of Britain, Cunobeline and father to Imogen, who encourages his daughter to marry Cloten.

Characters
So, I think in this realm all of you have done a really good job. It seems like there's a continuity between the ways each of you describe your respective characters, which is helpful. The details you provide also seem like they would be immensely useful for someone expressly referencing the characters section.

Performance History
These additions seem good too! I would say try to archive a few of the web sources, but I do not think it is required by any stretch, just maybe a good idea.

Small, Specific comments
Annabel and Elizabeth, I'd recommend dropping/replacing the pronouns in your character descriptions. It seems like implied pronouns are sort of the way things are done in character descriptions for other play articles. Not a huge deal of course, and I could be wrong (barging in from another group as I am), but it seems to lend the descriptions a spareness that works pretty well.

Elizabeth, your citations link back to your sandbox right now. It seems like you link to good sources in there, but I'd be careful when transferring them to the main article (that sort of mistake is exactly the kind of thing I'd end up doing, at least).

Cameryn, your source regarding the 2013 performance seems to include a broken link, as of now.

Overall good work, though.

Self Changes
For the editing of the wikipedia page, I functioned as the group leader and spokesperson of my group for characters and the synopiss. Although are work and ability to do much to tweaking to these parts, we managed to find certain places where we could improve. For my portion, I reached out to the performance history group and found out how we can help them out. In doing so, I informed my group of what changes could be made, specifically of the recent productions. Below are the specific edits to the performance history and the characters I will be doing, specifically the citations of the performance history performances. Cameryn looked over my edits and approved them.

Characters:

The Queen: Cymbeline's second wife and mother to Cloten.

Cloten: Prince of Britain, Queen's son by a former husband and step-brother to Imogen.

Cymbeline: Based off the historical King of Britain, Cunobeline and father to Imogen, who encourages his daughter to marry Cloten.

Performance History

In 2004 & 2014, the Hudson Shakespeare Company of New Jersey produced two distinct versions of the play. The 2004 production, directed by Jon Ciccarelli, embraced the fairy tale/Disney aspect of the story and produced a colorful version with wicked step mothers, feisty princesses and a campy Iachimo. The 2014 version, directed by Rachel Alt, went in a completely opposite direction and placed the action on ranch in the American old west. The Queen was a southern belle married to a rancher with Imogen as a high society girl in love with the cowhand Posthumous.

In 2011, the Shakespeare Theatre Company of Washington, DC, presented a version of the play that emphasized its fable and folklore elements, set as a tale within a tale, as told to a child.

In 2012, Antoni Cimolino directed a production at the Stratford Festival that steered into the fairy-tale elements of the text.

Article Evaluation
Reading the Slaughterhouse Five wikipedia article helped me better understand how wikipedia articles are written and how to better comprehend how these articles are written. Everything that I read in the article was important and related to the context of the article and topic. The beginning stated who the author was as well as a brief synopsis of the book. Despite the book being old, the information included was up to date and relevant. I would improve the way sentences flowed as the reading can be a bit choppy.

The article is easily read as neutral, with an informative tone. There is no bias when it comes to discussions of religion and philosophy that are included in the novel. When the relationship is challenged between religion and the characters belief, which may be offensive to some if not written or handled correctly. This article wrote the way Kurt Vonnegut handles the subject whilst not giving into the bias and staying factual.

The sources on the article were all correctly cited as far as I could tell. All the citations that I clicked were in working order and correctly cited themselves. All references that were used were correctly cited and reliably sourced.

One thing I would personally change is just how written the wikipedia page is. At times it is choppy and oftentimes feel robotic and not flowing well. I would probably work on better grammar and sentence flow while keeping the content of the article.