User:Mkaddache/Community health/Jbains03 Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Mkaddache
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mkaddache/Community health
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Community health

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead sentence could do a better job of explaining what the contents of the article will be! It might be helpful to layout what sections will be covered in the article to allow the reader to orient themselves. The content added is neutral, though there can be some improvement at certain points. The last sentence in particular could be broken up and made more neutral. The organization is good overall, and the flow of the edits is appropriately matched with the rest of the article. There can be some adjustments to cut-down sentence structure, and make the overall tone more scholarly. For instance, the addition of "and increase overall accessibility" would convey the same point without the addition of "overall". II'm not entirely positive whether this would be helpful, but based on the guiding questions it may be beneficial to add some information about the impact of community health on marginalized groups or explain the equity gap. The few links I tried work properly. Overall I think it's really good! I think there is room to add more, because as of right now it seems more small addition based when there feels like gaps that can offer more details. Additionally, I would just try to continue keeping a neutral tone!