User:Mkaddache/Healthcare in the United States/Jbains03 Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Mkaddache
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mkaddache/Healthcare in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Healthcare in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I am not entirely sure which edits were made because I couldn't find the key. However, going off of the original article and the differences I note I think the inclusion of edits doesn't disrupt the flow of the article overall. The tone of the edits is neutral, and overall beneficial for the structure of the paper. There can be edits made to offer more detail and bridge the gap between statements. For instance, maybe expand on this statement "the practice of employer-sponsored health insurance, a practice that is cemented into the work culture of today". What does employer-sponsored health insurance entail, and how is this cemented into the work culture of today? Similarly, the section "impact of drug companies" can also be expanded to provide some more background. The article can be worked towards being more complete! The tone and consistency of presenting information in a concise manner is good up until this point.